1st draft of 1st page.

This is my first draft of  my 1st page, of the double page spread. I am not to sure on it at the moment. Personally the more I look at it and edit it, I don't think it works. The aspect in which I don't feel works is the main image. I am going to ask my target audience, the people in my media class and my teacher to get feedback on it. The I will change it according the what they say.